Thứ Sáu, 16 tháng 10, 2009
Computer.
Nowadays, science-technology develops very strongly. So human's life is equiped fully with modern equipments such as: mobile phone, car, air condition... But, any thing also has advantages and disavantages. For example, the car are very useful in movement. However,they are the reason of environmental polution. There is device very neccessary in stydying as well as working. Do you know it? Yes, it's a computer. Of course, it also has advantages and disadvantages.
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grammar is fair
Trả lờiXóaintroduction is ok
good unity and coherence
idea is ok
introduction ok
Trả lờiXóaunity and coherence is ok
Grammar and vocabulary mistakes:
Trả lờiXóa+ any thing??? also??? has advantages and disavantages
The leading to the thesis statement is not very logical and smooth.
- the introduction should be rewritten.