Thứ Sáu, 16 tháng 10, 2009

Computer.

Nowadays, science-technology develops very strongly. So human's life is equiped fully with modern equipments such as: mobile phone, car, air condition... But, any thing also has advantages and disavantages. For example, the car are very useful in movement. However,they are the reason of environmental polution. There is device very neccessary in stydying as well as working. Do you know it? Yes, it's a computer. Of course, it also has advantages and disadvantages.

3 nhận xét:

  1. grammar is fair
    introduction is ok
    good unity and coherence
    idea is ok

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  2. introduction ok
    unity and coherence is ok

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  3. Grammar and vocabulary mistakes:
    + any thing??? also??? has advantages and disavantages

    The leading to the thesis statement is not very logical and smooth.
    - the introduction should be rewritten.

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